Recluse (South Mountain) (Poems)

Open bramble gate, morning lets itself in,
eyes open in welcome. Water stirs – a

glance outside. A jade tiger rises,
blue herons fly to South Mountain.


Forage through herb abundance on South
Mountain sunlight pooled in cassia leaves.

It’s why you reclused here, hermitage entwined
in viridian mists. I find your footprints

headed to the clouds, so I leave this
poem on your wall and on a whim

ascend South Mountain ridges. Sticks
snap underfoot – blue herons startle away.


Boundless and empty to townsfolk,
South Mountain peaks. But here

immortals dance among indomitable pines.
Above the sun blue herons fly into

paper crumpled clouds – clouds the body,
clouds the wings. Sonorous bird song –

radiant clarity – makes mountain forests
sing, each beat moves the clouds, red

dust cleared from rivers and peaks,
ochre streams flood forests and fields,

canyons and gorges, jades and emeralds rise.
Petals scatter on crystalline swells, night

lengthens slowly – coldness wanders by
but I will linger here, a little longer.


Poems and poets that inspired this:

And the Pokemon Altaria.

Picture one found here:

Picture two found here:

Picture three found here:

Some overflow with additional drafts (nearly included these instead):

About skyraftwanderer

A person who enjoys writing short story things, poetry and other random things that come into my head.
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18 Responses to Recluse (South Mountain) (Poems)

  1. claudia says:

    love the abundance of nature here…and love leaving the poem on the wall for someone…nice..

    • There’s a lot of Chinese poems titled (to the effect of) “On (insert name here) wall” and “Left on a silk screen”.

      It’s such a lovely idea. Should be done more often. I might try it some time.

  2. Ruth says:

    poems left for me to find – oh yes! and these words you leave are beautiful invitations to commune with nature (the paintings too are inspiring).

    • Thank you for the comment.

      I try to keep nature at the forefront in these, so seeing that recognised is nice.

      And I’d like poems left for people to find. It would brighten the world up.

  3. Fireblossom says:

    Very Gary Snyder-ish. It has that whole eastern sensibility to it. The herons, particularly, put the reader right there. And, thank you so much for your kind remarks on mine.

    • Thank you for the comment.

      Being compared to Snyder is very humbling. The herons were the basis for this, so it’s nice to see them commented upon.

      And your blog’s just really awesome. Like really really awesome. Just keep adding really’s.

  4. brian miller says:

    stunning visuals…all the mountains and life that bring it alive…really well done…

  5. I was particularly entranced by

    It’s why you reclused here, hermitage entwined
    in viridian mists. I find your footprints

    headed to the clouds, so I leave this
    poem on your wall and on a whim

    ascend South Mountain ridges. Sticks
    snap underfoot – blue herons startle away.

    I had no way to know if this was a friend visiting a contemporary friend’s lodging among poets in New Jersey while that person was away, or if this was some sort of trek in tribute to an ancient Chinese Mountain Poet. But I enjoyed the piece and the way so much of the natural world was woven in and valued. I had begun to think nature was just something we saw photos of on the Internet! Been locked in too long, I guess…

    • In my defense, South Mountain is a major figure in Chinese Mythology and it got to the point where poets referred to the closest southern mountain to them as South Mountain.

      But I can see your side as well. Nature be a nice thing. Fun to be in.

  6. tashtoo says:

    Wonderful escape for me this morning, and thought the presentation and images woven throughout were just fantastic.

  7. C Rose says:

    you pulled the surroundings into a wonderful backdrop for the story in this, lovely write ~ Rose

  8. D... says:

    Wow my friend. I just love the poet that you are becoming. It’s so awesome, and to keep it real the Pokemon influence is still with you. I want my class to learn to love words so they can one day create wonderful works too.
    The first stanza reminds me of parts of that movie “Crouching Tiger Hidden Dragon.”

    • It’s been a long road, but a worthwhile one. And Pokemon’s always awesome.

      Learning to love words is a wonderful thing. Hopefully your class will get it. Hell, if one gets it it’s a good thing.

      Nice comment on the reminder too. Given where the films set, it seems my imagery is good.

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