Train Stop Romance

Breath hangs in the air
taking it’s time in idle dissipation
before rising to star mottled heavens.

thacka, thacka, thacka, thacka, thacka.

A look around
synchronization of eye lines (even for a second)
and from there
it’s all based on counters.

thacka, thacka, THACKA, THACKA.

Smile replied in counter smile
glance returned in counter glance
(between looks, make sure it’s the same person,
lest things get hairy).


Courage peeks through waves of doubt
pondering a hi, a hello
a (gasp!) how’s your day been.
But then the red lokomotive
occupies the rail lined chasm.

THACKA, THACKA, THACKA, thacka, thacka, th..ack…a….
And like that she’s gone
and my train ain’t due
for another 20 minutes.


Picture found here:

Read a poem by Charles Bukowski (no idea why I waited so long) and figured I’d have a go.


About skyraftwanderer

A person who enjoys writing short story things, poetry and other random things that come into my head.
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18 Responses to Train Stop Romance

  1. This was a movie – and that’s meant to be a compliment! Absolutely alive! Great!

  2. brian miller says:

    smiles…def a great capture of the scene…and a missed moment as well…and opportunity now slipping on down the tracks….well writ….

  3. tashtoo says:

    Oh yes…I think I’m safe to assume the wait was worth it! 😉 Love CB…and love this write. Already had the picture painted in my mind before the image scrolled up on my screen.

  4. I like the “thacka thacka” sound, puts me in the scene. Nice write!

  5. Pat Hatt says:

    Thacka Thacka was fun for me too and just further backed up the scene you set. Great job!

  6. Oona Hays says:

    Good image! And also poem. Thanks for sharing.

  7. Lindy Lee says:

    The sounds of trains click & clatter and “thacka, thacka, thacka”. Nice poem, Skyraft…

  8. ayala says:

    courage peeks through waves of doubt
    pondering a hi, a hello………….cool lines!

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