Thick Fog, Burned Tower View In Flux

A September breeze twirls gossamer in and
around mulberry groves. Lone sail

fluxes between realms. I look for a
magic raft but gossamer lingers.


September billows craft gossamer spirals,
wrapping cassia in silken sheets.

Solitary raft in flux between realms.
I view no magic raft, the gate closes.


Septembers wind twists gossamer through
willow fingers. Single boat traverses paths

between dust and clarity. Gossamer grows dense,
and denser. Lantern flickers, empty raft trails.


Lone raft picks a route through gossamer,
in shift by September breeze. Two blue

herons catch my view, rafter vanishes.
Maybe he found a magic raft.


By moonlight, horse hooves patter, I
see you aboard your raft. Lantern

flickers on as you push off into gossamer
realms of September seeking magic rafts.


The mountains are the mist as the
mist is the water. One raft fades

from view, an empty one drifts by.
I watch alone – but can wait a little longer.



First image from here:

Second image from here: – Fifth poem from that series, and I felt like exploring it a bit further.


About skyraftwanderer

A person who enjoys writing short story things, poetry and other random things that come into my head.
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12 Responses to Thick Fog, Burned Tower View In Flux

  1. Writerlious says:

    Ooh –love this. Very Han Shan, modernized. 🙂


  2. Anything with lots of gossamer is a hit in my poetic books. Throw in some September rafts, mists and top it off with willow fingers and I’m hooked eternally!

    Thank you.

  3. mairmusic says:

    Interesting variations here– nice to see your process.

  4. siubhan says:

    i also love “gossamer”– especially in spirals 🙂
    but it was the last pair of couplets that really touched me.

  5. Eve Redwater says:

    Love it! The pictures you use are always amazing too. 😀

    • Picture selection has come long way from “well, it looks like a Chinese landscape” to “but really, is that raft in the right place?”.

      Plus it’s so much fun to do.

      And thank you for the comment.

  6. Laura says:

    I love this piece.

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