Thick Fog, Burned Tower View In Flux

A September breeze twirls gossamer in and
around mulberry groves. Lone sail

fluxes between realms. I look for a
magic raft but gossamer lingers.

~~~

September billows craft gossamer spirals,
wrapping cassia in silken sheets.

Solitary raft in flux between realms.
I view no magic raft, the gate closes.

~~~

Septembers wind twists gossamer through
willow fingers. Single boat traverses paths

between dust and clarity. Gossamer grows dense,
and denser. Lantern flickers, empty raft trails.

~~~

Lone raft picks a route through gossamer,
in shift by September breeze. Two blue

herons catch my view, rafter vanishes.
Maybe he found a magic raft.

~~~

By moonlight, horse hooves patter, I
see you aboard your raft. Lantern

flickers on as you push off into gossamer
realms of September seeking magic rafts.

~~~

The mountains are the mist as the
mist is the water. One raft fades

from view, an empty one drifts by.
I watch alone – but can wait a little longer.

~~~

~~~

First image from here: http://www.chineseartpaintings.com/images/products2/NP-CJ040Sb%5B1%5D.jpg

Second image from here: http://yipsf.leafbear.com/page/2/

https://skyraft.wordpress.com/2012/03/17/views-from-the-burned-tower/ – Fifth poem from that series, and I felt like exploring it a bit further.

About skyraftwanderer

A person who enjoys writing short story things, poetry and other random things that come into my head.
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12 Responses to Thick Fog, Burned Tower View In Flux

  1. Writerlious says:

    Ooh –love this. Very Han Shan, modernized. 🙂

    Erin
    http://www.erinbradypike.com

  2. Anything with lots of gossamer is a hit in my poetic books. Throw in some September rafts, mists and top it off with willow fingers and I’m hooked eternally!

    Thank you.

  3. mairmusic says:

    Interesting variations here– nice to see your process.

  4. siubhan says:

    i also love “gossamer”– especially in spirals🙂
    but it was the last pair of couplets that really touched me.

  5. Eve Redwater says:

    Love it! The pictures you use are always amazing too.😀

    • Picture selection has come long way from “well, it looks like a Chinese landscape” to “but really, is that raft in the right place?”.

      Plus it’s so much fun to do.

      And thank you for the comment.

  6. Laura says:

    I love this piece.

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