View from the Burned Out Tower (Extra)

River turtle scrambles from vine to water,
sunlight renders gossamer veils in twain.

Cranes fly north to jade peaks, and a
dragons endeavour is forever unending.

Sun hangs in azure clarity, Burned
Tower now black in golden yellow.

Empty cloud vastness once roamed by a legion
but arrows have always been plentiful.

~~~

First picture found here: http://riowang.blogspot.co.uk/2008_08_01_archive.html

Second picture found here: http://www.cnartgallery.com/mountainswoodentowerchinesepainting-p-536.html

Just two left from the first set: https://skyraft.wordpress.com/2012/03/17/views-from-the-burned-tower/

About skyraftwanderer

A person who enjoys writing short story things, poetry and other random things that come into my head.
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18 Responses to View from the Burned Out Tower (Extra)

  1. Mama Zen says:

    This is gorgeous!

  2. Eve Redwater says:

    Wonderful wordplay! And that snowy picture? Gorgeous!😀

  3. simonhlilly says:

    A meal, as usual. Taoist spells, intricate alchemy of vowels, belly chortles and farts……well, you know: the mundane in the mysterious……

  4. *** says:

    These couplets are bon-bons.
    And bon mots, of course🙂
    Love the use of endeavour

  5. Laurie Kolp says:

    Really beautiful… I especially like:

    Sun hangs in azure clarity, Burned
    Tower now black in golden yellow.

  6. zongrik says:

    last line makes a big statement on human nature…we are warmongering beings

  7. ManicDdaily says:

    Oh dear–your last couplet is especially powerful, but the whole poem has beautiful images. K.

  8. ed pilolla says:

    so compact and image-rich. fine art, too.

  9. hobgoblin2011 says:

    Oh all four of them are very good. I’m a big fan of Dragons so of course that one is my favorite of them, and azure, one of my favorite words. Great job. and the images are awesome. The first I love the texture to it, has a wonderful feel of antiquity and tradition to it, and the detail and depth in the second image is just outstanding, definitely the type of painting I’d have on one of my walls. Great poetry and thanks for sharing the images too. Works great together. Thanks

  10. marousia says:

    Oh, gorgeous, beautiful – stunning stunning images that work just so.

  11. I agree with others who have commented on the beauty of this. Really like the following!

    “Sun hangs in azure clarity, Burned
    Tower now black in golden yellow.” <—————- incredible!

  12. I’m in awe! The visual images are wonderful, matched as well by your poetry. I love both oriental art and poetry.

  13. D... says:

    Even though these are inspired by Chinese artwork, sometimes I think of Tanka/Wanka poetry, which is Japanese. I just finished this anime that showcased Karuta, which is a competitive card game that uses Tanka poetry to facilitate the game. It’s read in a specific manner, and when I read your short poems, I tend to hear it my head this way. It’s really interesting, but adds a tone that I am not sure you intended. I wish I could describe it better, because I wonder what you would think if you could hear it in your head the way I do. Hmm….maybe this comment made no sense. Sorry my friend if it did. But I wanted to say that I thought it was super good.

    • No it makes sense. Is it kind of like a chant? Cause old Chinese poems were written to sung aloud, like chants. If I’m doing that, well, that’s pretty nifty, cause I never intend to do that.

      Nah, you made sense. And thanks for the nice compliment. “super good” is very nice.

      • D... says:

        It’s not specifically a chant (like a buddhist chant), but it has a definite sort of chant feel. It’s a little like singing. I am not so sure when they began reading it in that sort of tone and rhythm. I found an example of karuta, the way the reader is reading each line is how I hear it in my head, but in english. Here’s a link I hope it works.

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