Grand Spear

Waves no waves.
Swells no swells.
Breakers no breakers

Form rendered from formless in blazing churn born of heavens grand spear.
Under heavens bridge eight worlds shine bright, and brighter.
A trail of phoenix feathers will lead there. Now, go there now!


Breakers. Formless.
Swells. Formless.
Waves. Formless.

Heavens great spear rends form from formless in blazing swirl.
Eight worlds born
where lightening wraps around beetle horns in mountains vast
where ancient fire refuses to incinerate a single leaf
where dragon fire burns without colour in azure rivers.

Feathers mark a holy fire trail. Follow them. Go now!



Image found here:

Playing with structure. Think I over wrote the second one. First one’s pretty nifty though.


About skyraftwanderer

A person who enjoys writing short story things, poetry and other random things that come into my head.
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10 Responses to Grand Spear

  1. brian miller says:

    wow…great creation song…the great spear bursting through birthing worlds….dramatic…also the contrast between the beetle and the dragon there toward the end is very interesting…

  2. so visual… a powerful myth in the making… makes me wonder what will emerge?

  3. I always like a good quest, with a tinge of myth and mysticism. Great drama.

  4. Pamela says:

    The form works well with the write, srw. It is quite visual.


  5. Truedessa says:

    Wow, this was interesting..I enjoyed the journey..thank you!

  6. What’s happened to the sea? It doesn’t sound at all like I remember…

  7. bostonpoetry says:

    Eight worlds… our solar system? I like where this leads.
    Feathers mark a holy fire trail. Cool imagery! -Mike

  8. Kelvin S.M. says:

    …interesting experimental vibe here… & quite dramatic without being too wordy… loved it… smiles…

  9. joanna says:

    i feel like this is way over my head, some creation-path that i am not enlightened enough to follow. i enjoyed both versions, however. the last line, i think, is stronger in the first, though.

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