Armour in vines.
Sword in weeds.
Phoenix feathers solitary blaze sought in the vast, empty black.
The dipper shines bright. Multi petal lotus unfurls ten thousand colours.
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Phoenix feather.
Empty vast black.
The dipper shines bright. Many petal lotus unfurls ten thousand colours.
Silver sword lies in weeds. Detached armour rests in ferns.
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Sword lies in weeds.
Armour rests in ferns.
Looking for a phoenix feather in vast empty black.
The dipper shines bright. Wandering eyes fade, and fade.
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Image found here: http://beinganalien.blogspot.co.uk/2012/02/night-view-of-tokyo-tower.html
Getting spaced out.
Golden Giraffes Riding Scarlet Flamingos Through The Desert of Forever 
really cool repetition in this, building the scene and accentuating the search for the feather….cool imagery as well…the discarded arms and armor, discarded safety to complete the quest…
there are some nice images here… I think the rearrangement of the phrases with each section is interesting.
Phoenix is a favorite myth and image…you capture the search well…:)
The Phoenix is such a powerful metaphor and what a tribute, well done!
Excellent. Unusual yet gripping. Well done.
This reads beautifully, sky. Enjoyable.
Pamela
Very dreamy reading.. the repetitions and slight variations work really well and.
Very cool shape and form.