Phoenix Feather

 Armour in vines.
Sword in weeds.

Phoenix feathers solitary blaze sought in the vast, empty black.
The dipper shines bright. Multi petal lotus unfurls ten thousand colours.


Phoenix feather.
Empty vast black.

The dipper shines bright. Many petal lotus unfurls ten thousand colours.
Silver sword lies in weeds. Detached armour rests in ferns.


Sword lies in weeds.
Armour rests in ferns.

Looking for a phoenix feather in vast empty black.
The dipper shines bright. Wandering eyes fade, and fade.


akasaka ukiyoe~~~

Image found here:

Getting spaced out.


About skyraftwanderer

A person who enjoys writing short story things, poetry and other random things that come into my head.
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8 Responses to Phoenix Feather

  1. brian miller says:

    really cool repetition in this, building the scene and accentuating the search for the feather….cool imagery as well…the discarded arms and armor, discarded safety to complete the quest…

  2. there are some nice images here… I think the rearrangement of the phrases with each section is interesting.

  3. 1emeraldcity says:

    Phoenix is a favorite myth and image…you capture the search well…:)

  4. The Phoenix is such a powerful metaphor and what a tribute, well done!

  5. Misky says:

    Excellent. Unusual yet gripping. Well done.

  6. Pamela says:

    This reads beautifully, sky. Enjoyable.


  7. Very dreamy reading.. the repetitions and slight variations work really well and.

  8. Very cool shape and form.

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