stars no stars.
moon no moon.
over cosmic rivers
dragon tails bat comets.
~~~
Idle gazing into star rivers
Crossed legs lose feeling
Across the black azure
Dragon tails bat comets
~~~
Idle gazing into black night azure.
Legs arranged as lotus lose all feeling.
Dragon tails bat comets without effort
over star rivers.
~~~
idle gaze into night black azure
intense sitting inherits bodhidharma’s legs
over the ancient bends of star rivers
dragon tails bat comets with no effort
~~~
Image one found here: http://www.japaneseprints-london.com/tag/isoda-koryusai/
Image two found here: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Bodhidharma
Again, many forms. I like it this way.
Golden Giraffes Riding Scarlet Flamingos Through The Desert of Forever 
The first image is highly suggestive of fractals, and there even hints in the second. Or maybe it is me.
I didn’t intend for that, but once a poems out, how it’s read is beyond my control.
And I like it that way. Thank you for reading.
Strolling around a poetic idea, looking from different angles. A lesson in perspective.
Truthfully, alot of this depends on the poem. Some come to form right away, and only need one version.
Sometimes though I do get a few ideas, and they are different enough to trial different forms. Tis good fun.
and thank you for reading.
new angles, new eyes, new sound, thank you!
Marvelous, sent my ruminations flying like those comets launched by the dragon’s tail.
ha. watching the dragon tails bat commets…now that would be a sight….
think i will sit and just watch….
thank you for sparking my imagination with these words, and the illustrations are just incredible.
Nicely designed and beautifully crafted.
Was drawn in with the first. What is the form?
It’s got such mystical mystery. I’ll be thinking about and seeing images of dragon tails and bats comets now.
I love this as I love dragons, sky. Nicely laid out poem.
Pamela
Great. Really great.
I loved the idea of batting comets because it brought up bats and comets and so easy to envisage bats in night sky, such an interesting idea–what with their wings, and all of the size differentials – there is a wonderful progression between dragons–bats–comets –from mythical to naturalistic (and almost homey) to the nearly grandiose, and well, truly threatening but also kind of awe-inspiring –very cool. Thanks. k.
Another beauty!…and how I love the dragon’s tail batting comets! ha! ~jackie~
Fantastical cosmic adventure… 🙂
V Zen! balanced and allowing for a real calming sense of revelation in the narration as I read some great lines that stick like: Dragon tails bat comets
FTW!
Many forms–I also like it this way! The second is my favorite phrasing, but each one adds something different to the experience. Very well done!
I for one am going to keep an eye out for that dragon’s tale. 🙂 Very whimsical, this.
i like all these iterations. and i’m glad you kept “dragon tails bat comets” throughout… that image caught me from the first.
love the disciplined economy of words to portray image and emotion.
I love the first verse.