September arrives on western winds,
empty raft drifts down stream.
~~~
A fisherman boards the raft
hoping to drift boundless under azure skies.
Floating on crystalline ripples he see’s
10,000 peaks disappearing into celestial realms
magpies darting from shore to shore
vast emerald forests of peach trees
raided by bellowing gibbons
nesting cranes incandescent in a world of dust.
10,000 creeks lead to the river
sunlight reflecting off trout scales
dragons dive and rise
flying over and crossing under.
Raft and fisherman drift out to sea.
Night fall, ascending to star river.
~~~
One ocean to another
streaking comets arcing over the milky way
supernova’s flash in the dark enigma
nebulas hang in pregnant emptiness
solar flares glitter in the darkness
as fisherman and raft drift through the void
shadowing galaxy’s swirls
soaring on cosmic winds
twisting through astral dust
outstretched hands run through the firmament.
Raft and fisherman spiral down towards
the centre riding empyrean gales
emerging in the western mountains
at the fisherman’s hut.
~~~
September arrives on zephyr stream,
empty raft drifts down river.
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Poem version of earlier post: https://skyraft.wordpress.com/2011/02/03/sky-raft-wanderer/ and inspired by countless Meng Hao Jan poems and the source of my username.
Sky Raft Wanderer mentioned in the poem New Years Ever at Chang Tzu-jung’s House at Lo-ch’eng: http://skyraftwanderer.blogspot.com/2011/06/new-years-ever-at-chang-tzu-jungs-house.html
Feedback welcomed, this may go through multiple drafts.
This is beautiful.
dragons dive and rise
flying over and crossing under.
Raft and fisherman drift out to sea.
Night fall, ascending to star river.
Thank you for the comment. Glad you enjoyed the poem.
The dragons were not part of it in the beginning but after reading another poem I decided to put them in to make it more fantastical. Looking like a good decision now.
Again, thanks for the comment. I also checked out your blog. Good stuff. I’ll be back again.
wow what a tale filled with incredible imagery…he left only to find what he needed back home…smiles…i think there is some wisdom in that…
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I had never thought of it like that but that is a wonderful view point.
This is just beautiful. I can feel the influence of Asian art and poetry. The last stanza is striking.
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I like the fact that my influences come through. Meng Hao Jan’s poetry means a lot to me.
This is so colorful and has such amazingly sharp images. So well done! Thanks for the links to the underlying prose and to book which has several readable pages available on Amazon. Hope you don’t mind but added this to my page of Excellent posts. (http://wp.me/P1FCt6-5N)
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I like that the imagery shines through. I feel I worked hard at that and its nice to see it succeed.
I am perfectly okay with being added to Excellent posts. It is both humbling and an honor. Thank you.
what a magnificent journey! thank you, I enjoyed it much.
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It was fun to write this and it’s nice to see people enjoying it.
what a ride.
excellent wording.
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I do love the words used by ancient Chinese poets. So beautiful.